Wonderful writing, interesting characters, and lovely intricate descriptions of the story and setting. I also loved how many options there were and it truly made the story feel more open world/ customizable.
With that being said, there does need to be some work on grammatical errors/ typos and at some point in the story the people with the W genes got mixed up with the people without the W genes which was confusing (when Dante first encountered the group of male humans with MC after they left MC's apartment and he commented on their scent). But otherwise the story and writing and everything else is wonderful! I know you're working on rewriting this so I'm sure these will be addressed after the next update. I'm looking forward to seeing more! Take all the time you need! ☺️💕
I tried playing the game, but I'm not sure if it's complex to just me or maybe I'm just an idiot but I was just so confused as I played this. There are some grammatical errors that I can tell at first glance, but the story is extremely different from what I've seen and played before and that is a good thing. The appearance choices are by far the most diverse in questions I've ever seen, but the hair and eye colors are somewhat lacking, you give the choice to say your hair is locked but there isn't a hair length revolving around having your hair braided or something similar. As far as the eyes go, I was kinda hoping for heterochromia or possibly having a missing eye but than again we are 22. I was very confused as I played but I enjoyed what I understood and think this a good game.
When is chapter six going to be released? I tried looking for if you posted anything about updating, but couldn't find anything atm. I love your works, they are very well written and the plot/storyline is very interesting and makes me want to read more, even though I tend to hate reading in general. Hope you have a good day!! <3
Gah dayumn! This was hot! Characters are hot! Writing is hot! Can't wait to update! Wholly awesome. and the ending was 👁️👄👁️ uh huh I'm side eyeing that one...
I did play it again and pay attention to the personality stats and when you saying you get along with your dad part where you get to pic your relationship kindness restarts I was at 60 and it went down to 50 again and when before you make a pac with dante when you can you don't trust him or you worried going to hurt it kind of werid when you say you are scared that it hurt the relationship with dante should as it should which it does but so does being trusting but not trusting goes up which makes no sense but when you tell him you don't trust him my 65 in trusting stays the same but relationship don't change
This is my new comfort game <3 It's frustrating not being able to fight back, but it's also nice being taken care of by huge demon dog man. I hope we get to do something useful soon though.
Yeh I was confused when came across that as someone who prefers to play male characters. It was confusing and I noticed the character description will say you don't have the male parts if you say no to breasts on that lol
Dante pulls you into his arms, enveloping you in his constant warmth. (after choosing not to share a bed and trying to move away from him)
"Here. Take my hand."
You do, feeling him grip your hand tightly but gently before helping you out the wide window and onto the roof, keeping a hold on you. (No hesitation? Sometimes it feels like my own MC doesn't even know they're touch adverse)
Basically he whole of chapter 5, which wouldn't be a problem if MC actually spoke on it more or showed actual discomfort; creating some sort of understanding with Dante and any of the other characters, that they need permission.
I hope I don't sound mean, i never want to come off nasty to any of you writers/authors. Chapter 1 was great in that regard, it was actually acknowledged multiple times. But idk, I just think the best option would be to remove it as a whole. That way the people who pick it, don't get such a shock when the plot comes into play.
You're right!! I think at the moment alot of the options come out short and straight up ignored die to time limitations on my part as a whole but that this is ultimately a demo and there are various things I need to rework at a later date, but I do thank you for pointing that out.
First of all, I love the customization option! So simple and efficient! as for the story! It really enjoyed it! Well done! I encountered some mispelled/misused word but it's nothing a little tweaking cannot fix. You did well with this OP! I am looking forward to more!
PS. Already torn between Dante and Warden shdfsdkgfsdf <3
Hi there i just foound this game and i absolutely love it! though i did find some typos so since i dont know if there are any place where i ca report it other than here i the comments, i'll just show it here
those who have not played the game beware of spoilers!
this one was from when we ask Dante why he attacked us^
this ones in his bio
this ones the last typo i found, and its found after Dante tells us about his memory of one of our sibs!
anyway all these typos are pretty small but i wanted to tell you, anyway keep up the great work!
I usually don't comment, but the story grabbed me, not to mention the prospect of the characters.❤❤ I love Dante and I love the details and the amount of choices. The way you write makes me feel like we really connect with the characters and what surrounds us. Great job, take care of yourself.✨✨
I didn't know that it got updated until I saw some asks on your Tumblr that caused me to check to see if it got updated. Holy crap, I didn't want the current chapter to end. So I can't wait for the following Friday for chapter four to be released.
Completely and utterly enjoyed the update. And i love the revamp of the page and all of the customization is sooo cool!! Must have taken you God knows how long. I cant even imagine the amount of work you did. GREAT JOB!
I loved it. Didn't see any bugs besides a slight issue where I can't scroll past save slot 4. Have no issue scrolling the menu page or while reading but when I want to save it only shows until save slot 4 and I'm not able to scroll any lower. Thats about all.
Good luck with the rest of the story and writing. You are doing so great thank you for sharing with us. ♥️
The switching around of acts confused me a bit and there were a couple of places where the section was the same but the continuity felt off, the only major one I can think of is when it refers to the pet, Chino, as a dog and a cat in the same sentence.
OTHERWISE.....
I totally love this!!!!
I get distracted and bored really easily, but the plot was super engaging and overall, it's really well written. You've got a diamond in the rough; this piece has a lot of potential and I look forward to seeing where it goes. Great work. I've been reading a lot of interactive fiction lately and so far, this is among my favorites.
This game is amazing. Ngl, I went into this quite casually just like not expecting anything honestly, but I was absolutely blown away by the writing.
The way you build the atmosphere and create tension was just phenomenal, and I was shocked at how the lore of the story actually sucked me in. It fascinated me so much and do not get me started on the characterization. I don't know how you did it, but every single character like every single one just made me fall in love with them. They were given so much life and meaning that it made me just fall in love.
I hope that you will continue this story, and I will for sure be keeping a keen eye on it.
It's really good. I did notice some spelling mistakes but its not bad were it will take people out of the story just one of them will, it on the closet part trying to get out of the bedroom I think. slide off your bed is spelled wrong. sorry I forgot how to take a screen shot with my computer so I just pasted the sentence xD.
"You side of your bed, putting the large object between you and the closet door. Slowly back up until you reach the furthest wall. Your bedroom door was on the other side of the room, merely a few feet from your closet."
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Wonderful writing, interesting characters, and lovely intricate descriptions of the story and setting. I also loved how many options there were and it truly made the story feel more open world/ customizable.
With that being said, there does need to be some work on grammatical errors/ typos and at some point in the story the people with the W genes got mixed up with the people without the W genes which was confusing (when Dante first encountered the group of male humans with MC after they left MC's apartment and he commented on their scent). But otherwise the story and writing and everything else is wonderful! I know you're working on rewriting this so I'm sure these will be addressed after the next update. I'm looking forward to seeing more! Take all the time you need! ☺️💕
I tried playing the game, but I'm not sure if it's complex to just me or maybe I'm just an idiot but I was just so confused as I played this. There are some grammatical errors that I can tell at first glance, but the story is extremely different from what I've seen and played before and that is a good thing. The appearance choices are by far the most diverse in questions I've ever seen, but the hair and eye colors are somewhat lacking, you give the choice to say your hair is locked but there isn't a hair length revolving around having your hair braided or something similar. As far as the eyes go, I was kinda hoping for heterochromia or possibly having a missing eye but than again we are 22. I was very confused as I played but I enjoyed what I understood and think this a good game.
When is chapter six going to be released? I tried looking for if you posted anything about updating, but couldn't find anything atm. I love your works, they are very well written and the plot/storyline is very interesting and makes me want to read more, even though I tend to hate reading in general. Hope you have a good day!! <3
Right now, Chapters 1 - 6 are all being rewritten, with Chapters 1 - 3 finished! Im aiming for the end of the year to drop all chapters!!
Do you mean that you're releasing all the chapters at the end of the year or are you like posting periodically over the months?
Releasing all the chapters at once, then going back to periodically releasing chapters.
Publicly??
Yes!!
S-Tier Writing. Anything else is a lie and you should play this game right now.
Gah dayumn! This was hot! Characters are hot! Writing is hot! Can't wait to update! Wholly awesome. and the ending was 👁️👄👁️ uh huh I'm side eyeing that one...
IS THIS NOT THE BEST IF EVER?????
NOOO I DID NOT EXPECT THAT ENDING, I REALLY CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE UPDATES ON THIS, I LITERALLY LOVE DANTE
I did play it again and pay attention to the personality stats and when you saying you get along with your dad part where you get to pic your relationship kindness restarts I was at 60 and it went down to 50 again and when before you make a pac with dante when you can you don't trust him or you worried going to hurt it kind of werid when you say you are scared that it hurt the relationship with dante should as it should which it does but so does being trusting but not trusting goes up which makes no sense but when you tell him you don't trust him my 65 in trusting stays the same but relationship don't change
I am stuck on literally the same problem! Y do i feel like the stats r overly confusing?
Would you ever consider making your games downloadable? My internet connection is unreliable.
AIEEEEEE DANTE IS SO FUCKING HOT OAHDIFRPPESMSBM
i absolutely cannot wait for more
totally not for more interactions with our smegsy bloodhoundhate say but love it my fav is F-24 XD nuts right? maybe because he pretty much only cares for you :O
This is my new comfort game <3 It's frustrating not being able to fight back, but it's also nice being taken care of by huge demon dog man. I hope we get to do something useful soon though.
this is so incredibly funny
Yeh I was confused when came across that as someone who prefers to play male characters. It was confusing and I noticed the character description will say you don't have the male parts if you say no to breasts on that lol
Yep lol it confused me as well so I guess it's a typo o,o i think so i click yes to breasts XD <,,< right??? I am not sure anymore XD!
happy 100 days to this. 💪i honestly forgot this ever existed
is this game that legit? I literally just made a profile today and was browsing and hear a lot of good things about it.
Loved the update! Looking forward to more!
Dante pulls you into his arms, enveloping you in his constant warmth. (after choosing not to share a bed and trying to move away from him)
Basically he whole of chapter 5, which wouldn't be a problem if MC actually spoke on it more or showed actual discomfort; creating some sort of understanding with Dante and any of the other characters, that they need permission.
I hope I don't sound mean, i never want to come off nasty to any of you writers/authors. Chapter 1 was great in that regard, it was actually acknowledged multiple times. But idk, I just think the best option would be to remove it as a whole. That way the people who pick it, don't get such a shock when the plot comes into play.
You're right!! I think at the moment alot of the options come out short and straight up ignored die to time limitations on my part as a whole but that this is ultimately a demo and there are various things I need to rework at a later date, but I do thank you for pointing that out.
WAIT AM I TRIPPIN IT’S SUPPOSED TO UPDATE TODAY RIGHT??
YAY AN UPDATE!!
First of all, I love the customization option! So simple and efficient!
as for the story! It really enjoyed it! Well done! I encountered some mispelled/misused word but it's nothing a little tweaking cannot fix. You did well with this OP! I am looking forward to more!
PS. Already torn between Dante and Warden shdfsdkgfsdf <3Damn that's a first time i see harem route😳 sign me up! Lol
dante is so DADDYY.
Hi there i just foound this game and i absolutely love it! though i did find some typos so since i dont know if there are any place where i ca report it other than here i the comments, i'll just show it here
those who have not played the game beware of spoilers!
this one was from when we ask Dante why he attacked us^
this ones in his bio
this ones the last typo i found, and its found after Dante tells us about his memory of one of our sibs!
anyway all these typos are pretty small but i wanted to tell you, anyway keep up the great work!
everyone is so hot omg im fainting
The moment I read mary janes my heart did a backflip tho im sad you can't be a gyaru in here GREAT GAME I LOVE IT
Definitely gonna add that option!
OMG TY SM IM LITERALLY DOING HAPPY TWIRLS
I have a bug where I'm unable to change any of the drop-down options. How can I fix this?
Knowing that I'll have a difficult time choosing between Dante and the warden in the future, makes me smile.
I usually don't comment, but the story grabbed me, not to mention the prospect of the characters.❤❤ I love Dante and I love the details and the amount of choices. The way you write makes me feel like we really connect with the characters and what surrounds us. Great job, take care of yourself.✨✨
Pd: I can't wait to meet Warden!!❤
I didn't know that it got updated until I saw some asks on your Tumblr that caused me to check to see if it got updated. Holy crap, I didn't want the current chapter to end. So I can't wait for the following Friday for chapter four to be released.
The update was amazing as always ✨
Completely and utterly enjoyed the update. And i love the revamp of the page and all of the customization is sooo cool!! Must have taken you God knows how long. I cant even imagine the amount of work you did. GREAT JOB!
I loved it. Didn't see any bugs besides a slight issue where I can't scroll past save slot 4. Have no issue scrolling the menu page or while reading but when I want to save it only shows until save slot 4 and I'm not able to scroll any lower. Thats about all.
Good luck with the rest of the story and writing. You are doing so great thank you for sharing with us. ♥️
I've just discovered this gem, where the hell was I all this time :/?
The switching around of acts confused me a bit and there were a couple of places where the section was the same but the continuity felt off, the only major one I can think of is when it refers to the pet, Chino, as a dog and a cat in the same sentence.
OTHERWISE.....
I totally love this!!!!
I get distracted and bored really easily, but the plot was super engaging and overall, it's really well written. You've got a diamond in the rough; this piece has a lot of potential and I look forward to seeing where it goes. Great work. I've been reading a lot of interactive fiction lately and so far, this is among my favorites.
Is it possible to have a monogamous relationship in this game?
It is!!
This game is amazing. Ngl, I went into this quite casually just like not expecting anything honestly, but I was absolutely blown away by the writing.
The way you build the atmosphere and create tension was just phenomenal, and I was shocked at how the lore of the story actually sucked me in. It fascinated me so much and do not get me started on the characterization. I don't know how you did it, but every single character like every single one just made me fall in love with them. They were given so much life and meaning that it made me just fall in love.
I hope that you will continue this story, and I will for sure be keeping a keen eye on it.
wooooow. already hooked like a fish
It's really good. I did notice some spelling mistakes but its not bad were it will take people out of the story just one of them will, it on the closet part trying to get out of the bedroom I think. slide off your bed is spelled wrong. sorry I forgot how to take a screen shot with my computer so I just pasted the sentence xD.
"You side of your bed, putting the large object between you and the closet door. Slowly back up until you reach the furthest wall. Your bedroom door was on the other side of the room, merely a few feet from your closet."
Thank you!! Hopefully I’ve fixed!! Aswell as gone back and fixed any other spelling errors!
Words cannot express how deeply in love I am with this if game! From characters to writing, everything is perfection <3
Thank you so much!!! I am really happy with how the first chapter came out and I’m really happy that you’ve enjoyed it!!