The first popup image seems to be broken, I don't remember what page but it's when the Aaru fella shows up. And Viento called the MC by the preset name instead of the one I typed in, happened on PG.24 as it was called in the save file. There's also a lot of grammatical errors past that point.
I think there's a mistake in the height selection during the customization at the start. It seems "<" and ">" are mixed up, because ">5ft" means "more than 5ft", and I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be less. Same with "<6'10ft", the other way around.
I'm sorry, maybe it's just my device… I feel like it may be as I cannot find anyone else who has commented about it but I chose my character species and I keep getting an error message (edit: it's not an error message but I am unsure of what to call it):
followed by it constantly referring to my character as Mcspecies which while an epic name I don't think it was offered as a species… help?
That is absolutely odd!! I've checked the coding right now and it seems like a possible error on your part. I would say double check to see if you actually selected a species, cause that could be the problem!!
It was indeed on my part. I thought I had selected a species but apparently, I had not. 🤦♀️ Sorry about that. Thank you for responding and being willing to check the coding.
With romance, you'll be able to pick if you want a specific relationship with a character. This option will become open to you depending on the amount of points you have with romantic attraction and approval for each character!
this is literally one of the best if's ive come across on here; seriously. just the customization aspects alone warranted me this reaction. i love how detailed oriented everything is and how options you pick will actually play a role in the story. this is so fucking good and im so ready for chapter 2 whenever it comes out 🙈
Ahh!! I actually love this very muchhh~ I don't really care about the timer since I'm a fast reader and always have at least 210 seconds still, so! Idk who I'm liking more still... Maybe Viento?? Like- his name is wind in spanish so be like... I- That Maybe doesn't have much matter but it does have with me, okay?! 😭😭
this is amazing, there so much to it and so many details for your character. the timers do add some panic for me, but it also presses me to look for what is important to remember. I look forward to future chapters
The timers in this are... poorly executed in my opinion. The only thing they seem to test is reading speed. 5 minutes is waaay more than enough to give you time to make an informed decision so it doesn't provoke a quick reaction under pressure from the reader, instead it is more of a challenge for you to read, digest, and understand the long and drawn out prose that accompanies the timer. A fast reader will have minutes left on the clock to carefully consider options, while a slow reader will be left with much less time unless they skim-read the page. I don't really see the point in testing reading speed so I can only assume that this is a mishandled mechanic.
Ideally, a timer would be on its own page with only necessary text. The decision you must make, the timer, and the choices you have.
I swear, I thought I responded this, but this comment really helped me reevaluate how I wanted to do the timers!! So I do really want to thank you for that!! <3
Glad to help!!! I like picking apart game mechanics and understanding what they want, what they do, and when those things misalign. I'm very happy my ramblings gave you some insight!
I don't wanna sound like I'm being nitpicky, but your feet/inches - centimeter conversions are pretty off. 175 is about 5'9", 180 is about 5'11" 178 is about 5'10", etc.
I was pretty confused when I saw 5'7" - a height that is shorter than me - compared to 175 cm - a height that is taller than me. Otherwise, super excited to see where this goes
This is one of the best IFs I've ever seen and had the pleasure of reading. I sincerely hope that it gets finished and doesn't end up like the dozens that never do.
Nah same, cause that's what anyone would think. With an actual in game timer, it seems to be telegraphing to use that, not the option that seems to be going against the timer.
Hey, sorry in advance, i wanted to ask about underwear. Will mc always wear bra even if their chest is flat\top surgery\masculine prefered\clothing? They even saying - before that that they never weared one or never even needed it and still putting it on. Or is it tied to being afab?
I really really wanted to experience the update, but being a slow reader, reading on mobile and having pages jumping without me even realizing I was being timed, I just can't even finish it. I am interested in this story but because of how slow I read I can't actually finish it or enjoy reading with the timers. I am sorry, I hope everything goes well for you!
I'm really sorry to hear that!! Though hopefully the problem was fixed,further info here, with the increased times you'll have. If the time is still far too fast, please let me know. I want to be able to allow anyone to enjoy it!! Even slow readers.
Guys guys I’m running on zero sleep for the past 14 hours and I can already tell this is going to become a hyper fixation reaaaal quick. Is Viento a love interest? Please say yes. Also Eric is my husband. I’ve already decided that Eric is my lover of 10 years and he doesn’t have a say in it. Neither does Viento if he’s an option.
I've got a question. (proceeds to type a wall of text- oops-)
Are The Nine only siblings in name or are they actually related? How are the poly dynamics going to work if they are related? Cuz, personally, that would feel really freaking weird (even if they are ...demons? ...devils?). I know they are made of the devils' organs but does that mean he is their father???
Also, why is Commander Anil/Aiden only referred to as "Anil" in the demo? Is the Phantom Weaver an RO? They have romance points but aren't mentioned on this page. What does the "AMAB/AFAB" in the characters' description mean exactly? (are they intersex, gender selectable??)
So many questions 😫
PS: Sorry about the wall of text... and the many questions :')
PPS: there seems to be some kind of error in the MCs profile
So many questions!! 💀 The nine are siblings are only siblings in name but nothing else due to them being personifications and the devil's organ giving them life, but I will go more into what they are in game.
Phantom Weaver is an unconfirmed RO.
Anil is only referred as Anil due to her relation to Phantom Weaver. Which will be furthered explained.
The AMAB/AFAB is for the characters that are intersex and or can change genitalia.
Seriously though, great start I'm deffinitely intrigued! Also this is the closest I've come to being able to recreate one of my (more intricate) OCs in an IF game. Shes Fae.... which is my recently tought up excuse for shoving every possible fantastical feature onto her 🗿
PS: In the middle of the char creation I thought "I wonder if the wings will be needed for something" and then I slapped some of those bad boys on fgveyiask
ANYWAYS I'm gonna go now before I think up another absolute UNIT of questions 🗿
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The first popup image seems to be broken, I don't remember what page but it's when the Aaru fella shows up.
And Viento called the MC by the preset name instead of the one I typed in, happened on PG.24 as it was called in the save file. There's also a lot of grammatical errors past that point.
I love this so much, from how detailed you can make the MC and the worldbuilding/characters too!! Hopefully there'll be more <33
I think there's a mistake in the height selection during the customization at the start. It seems "<" and ">" are mixed up, because ">5ft" means "more than 5ft", and I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be less. Same with "<6'10ft", the other way around.
Wasn't putting much hope but holy shit I am invested in this one, good luck with the updates!
I'm sorry, maybe it's just my device… I feel like it may be as I cannot find anyone else who has commented about it but I chose my character species and I keep getting an error message (edit: it's not an error message but I am unsure of what to call it):
followed by it constantly referring to my character as Mcspecies which while an epic name I don't think it was offered as a species… help?
That is absolutely odd!! I've checked the coding right now and it seems like a possible error on your part. I would say double check to see if you actually selected a species, cause that could be the problem!!
It was indeed on my part. I thought I had selected a species but apparently, I had not. 🤦♀️ Sorry about that. Thank you for responding and being willing to check the coding.
When will the next chapter be released? Also I love how detailed the character creation is, very unique.
I have no idea yet!! I'm trying to write for my other IF and get the first half completed, which is taking a hot moment. But I'm working on NBD!!
Is your other IF TSTT? I just finished Chapter 4, and it was amazing!! Are you working on Chapter 5 currently
How would romance work with lust?
With romance, you'll be able to pick if you want a specific relationship with a character. This option will become open to you depending on the amount of points you have with romantic attraction and approval for each character!
This may be odd but knowing you made this and TSTT makes me feel safe and i'm not sure why lol
That means the world to me!!! I'm so glad that you love both IFs!!
this is literally one of the best if's ive come across on here; seriously. just the customization aspects alone warranted me this reaction. i love how detailed oriented everything is and how options you pick will actually play a role in the story. this is so fucking good and im so ready for chapter 2 whenever it comes out 🙈
Ahh!! I actually love this very muchhh~ I don't really care about the timer since I'm a fast reader and always have at least 210 seconds still, so! Idk who I'm liking more still... Maybe Viento?? Like- his name is wind in spanish so be like... I- That Maybe doesn't have much matter but it does have with me, okay?! 😭😭
this is amazing, there so much to it and so many details for your character. the timers do add some panic for me, but it also presses me to look for what is important to remember. I look forward to future chapters
The timers in this are... poorly executed in my opinion. The only thing they seem to test is reading speed. 5 minutes is waaay more than enough to give you time to make an informed decision so it doesn't provoke a quick reaction under pressure from the reader, instead it is more of a challenge for you to read, digest, and understand the long and drawn out prose that accompanies the timer. A fast reader will have minutes left on the clock to carefully consider options, while a slow reader will be left with much less time unless they skim-read the page. I don't really see the point in testing reading speed so I can only assume that this is a mishandled mechanic.
Ideally, a timer would be on its own page with only necessary text. The decision you must make, the timer, and the choices you have.
I swear, I thought I responded this, but this comment really helped me reevaluate how I wanted to do the timers!! So I do really want to thank you for that!! <3
Glad to help!!! I like picking apart game mechanics and understanding what they want, what they do, and when those things misalign. I'm very happy my ramblings gave you some insight!
Any chance of a romance with Viento? Because he's way more likeable than anyone else at this point.
THIS IS SO COOL AHHHHHHHHHHH
this is fucking AMAAAZZZINNNGGGG. the efforts are evidently there and the demo was already super interesting.
I don't wanna sound like I'm being nitpicky, but your feet/inches - centimeter conversions are pretty off. 175 is about 5'9", 180 is about 5'11" 178 is about 5'10", etc.
I was pretty confused when I saw 5'7" - a height that is shorter than me - compared to 175 cm - a height that is taller than me. Otherwise, super excited to see where this goes
This is one of the best IFs I've ever seen and had the pleasure of reading. I sincerely hope that it gets finished and doesn't end up like the dozens that never do.
<3 I cant wait for Dameion >3> don't he sound familiar <3? I want kiss him hug and pamper him and other things >///3///> ^////^
this is amazing, I love with how many options for our MC, thank you for putting a lot of work for it. Keep it up<333
is the only genital option supposed to be a penis or is this a bug 😭
i'm wating for that answer lol
The options are based upon which genitalia you select. So if you select male genitals, the penis will the only option that appears.
Bitch I'm so dumb T-T
I literally waited ten second in the timer I'm so fukicjg nmdumb
Nah same, cause that's what anyone would think. With an actual in game timer, it seems to be telegraphing to use that, not the option that seems to be going against the timer.
Hey, sorry in advance, i wanted to ask about underwear. Will mc always wear bra even if their chest is flat\top surgery\masculine prefered\clothing? They even saying - before that that they never weared one or never even needed it and still putting it on. Or is it tied to being afab?
That should not the case!! Hopefully, I changed this output and it should be altered, so if you have masculine type clothing, a bra won't be offered.
Thanks. I'll just leave the part I'm talking about here. Speedruned from the start - all masc except genitalia
I really really wanted to experience the update, but being a slow reader, reading on mobile and having pages jumping without me even realizing I was being timed, I just can't even finish it. I am interested in this story but because of how slow I read I can't actually finish it or enjoy reading with the timers. I am sorry, I hope everything goes well for you!
I'm really sorry to hear that!! Though hopefully the problem was fixed,further info here, with the increased times you'll have. If the time is still far too fast, please let me know. I want to be able to allow anyone to enjoy it!! Even slow readers.
I will try again soon and let you know if it is still too fast for me, thank you!
Guys guys I’m running on zero sleep for the past 14 hours and I can already tell this is going to become a hyper fixation reaaaal quick. Is Viento a love interest? Please say yes. Also Eric is my husband. I’ve already decided that Eric is my lover of 10 years and he doesn’t have a say in it. Neither does Viento if he’s an option.
YAYYY THE NEW UPDATE IS SO AMAZING I AM ALREADY IN LOVE W ALICE >3<
Am I tweaking or is today not the 9th😭
i love the character customization!! there's, like, so many choices
It's low key laming me think too hard T-T
wow, this lowekey seems really cool, there's so many characters
Reading the description made me excited to play the demo already
just a few more days^3^
Just finish the demo. I'm loving it so far and holy shit on customization but i love it makes me feel like its my person.
Wow this is an amazing game so far and im sure its about to get even better thank you !
I've got a question.
(proceeds to type a wall of text- oops-)Are The Nine only siblings in name or are they actually related? How are the poly dynamics going to work if they are related? Cuz, personally, that would feel really freaking weird (even if they are ...demons? ...devils?). I know they are made of the devils' organs but does that mean he is their father???
Also, why is Commander Anil/Aiden only referred to as "Anil" in the demo? Is the Phantom Weaver an RO? They have romance points but aren't mentioned on this page. What does the "AMAB/AFAB" in the characters' description mean exactly? (are they intersex, gender selectable??)
So many questions 😫
PS: Sorry about the wall of text... and the many questions :')
PPS: there seems to be some kind of error in the MCs profile
So many questions!! 💀 The nine are siblings are only siblings in name but nothing else due to them being personifications and the devil's organ giving them life, but I will go more into what they are in game.
Phantom Weaver is an unconfirmed RO.
Anil is only referred as Anil due to her relation to Phantom Weaver. Which will be furthered explained.
The AMAB/AFAB is for the characters that are intersex and or can change genitalia.
Me literally 2 seconds after finishing the demo:
LMAO thanks for answering my questions 💀💀
Seriously though, great start I'm deffinitely intrigued! Also this is the closest I've come to being able to recreate one of my (more intricate) OCs in an IF game. Shes Fae.... which is my recently tought up excuse for shoving every possible fantastical feature onto her 🗿
PS: In the middle of the char creation I thought "I wonder if the wings will be needed for something" and then I slapped some of those bad boys on fgveyiask
ANYWAYS I'm gonna go now before I think up another absolute UNIT of questions 🗿
I love!
i'm sorry but is the species buttons suppose to work? 😭 i just can't really click anything besides the next button.
Oh no!! It is supposed to work! Try restarting the story and see if there's any changes!
i figured it out! sorry about this;;
I'm having the same issue. Restarting doesn't help
I like what we got now and i cant wait for more <3
Am so in love highly recommend this wip
Interesting start, can't wait for more!
author, this is a very huge amount of customization 😨. im somewhat concerned with how much youll have to keep track of, but i love the wip so far! 🙏